Great start Nelle! You nailed Ollie in this fic. Excited for the Chlollie coming up.
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I love your build up to Chlollie. Its good to establish what was going through Ollie when it came to Lois/Clois and Chloe's part in his dark times. I love it.. you've nailed it on the head IMO. Can't wait to read more!!. PPMS!Comment
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I love the chapter Hun.. its perfect.. imo i can so see those thoughts go through him, resistance and then giving in. Worry about crossing the line and yet that subconscious desire winning out.. I love it..especially how he waited for her to give him that permission before kissing her.
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Originally posted by SVfan87^^ you've got great timing, you know. i was literally just about to delete that post so i could work on it some more. i was rereading it and it still seemed a little off. but then i saw your comment.
you're too sweet. what you said actually makes me feel a LOT better.Comment
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Oh this is so good. I could so see Ollie going through all of this in his mind. And you really nailed it about him not usually being nervous but in this situation he is and Chloe is the one who can put him in his place when he needs to be. Awesome! I can't wait for the rest!Last edited by chlo-el; 01-10-2011, 09:31 PM.Comment
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OH I love it!!.. You did great with Chloe i could hear her..and Poor Ollie and that 800 pound gorilla. I can see this being how it was especially with How Chloe was so determined at first for it to just be 'play' trying to protect her heart.. .. can't wait for the next update .. PPMS!Comment
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