Dollhouse Fanfic

[fresley4ever]

I wrote a little bit of a Dollhouse fanfic. I am not sure how anyone would feel about the premise of it. I would like to know what everyone else thinks of it. Mostly I am looking for grammar flaws and stuff like that. Anyways here is it is.

spider_lily: Dollhouse Fanfic (http://spider-lily.livejournal.com/288393.html)